Winning Short Screenplay – Jane’s Inner Voice by Ian Wilson

Written by Ian Wilson


NARRATOR – Peter Nelson
JANE – Megan Allen
JOHN – Dan Cristofori


Romance, Comedy

While Jane waits for her date, John, at the restaurant, Jane’s Inner Voice chides her and puts doubts in her head about John’s suitability and intentions.

Get to know the winning writer:

What is your screenplay about?

While Jane waits for her date, John, at the restaurant, Jane’s Inner Voice chides her and puts doubts in her head about John’s suitability and intentions. When John arrives late for the date it looks like he has blown it. How will Jane react?

What genres does your screenplay under?


Why should this screenplay be made into a movie?

There is a message in this story that makes this screenplay worthy of expanding into a movie. We all have perceptions created by our inner-voices. These inner-voices are not always positive or accurate and, on reflection, if we ensure they don’t take control of us, they can be comedic.

How would you describe this script in two words?

Overcoming Perceptions.

What movie have you seen the most times in your life?

Hmmmm… I think that would be Shrek. When my kids were young it was a regular tape in the VHS player. It’s a great parody which brings us an unlikely underdog as a protagonist, while turning the fairy-tale story on its head.

How long have you been working on this screenplay?

It probably took a few hours. I had it written as a 7-8 minute short but cutting it down to a one-page, tight little story was an invigorating challenge.

How many stories have you written?

I have written four shorts and two features. Two of the shorts have made it to film and a third has an option on it.

What motivated you to write this screenplay?

I wrote this because I like the concept of using our inner voices as separate characters in a story. Inner voices are unseen but can be terribly influential to a story. Once I had the basic story formed, I was impelled to enter the one-page challenge in the L.A. Feedback Festival because creating a story with dialogue/action inside of a single page is a test of my writing and editing abilities.

What obstacles did you face to finish this screenplay?

Condensing the story into a single page, while keeping it vivid with good dialogue was a challenge. It took many iterations.

Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?

Recently, I have been getting involved in filmmaking. In Atlantic Canada we have an excellent filmmakers’ co-operative that provides workshops, low-cost equipment rental and mentoring to its member. I recently wrote and directed a short silent film and I am in the planning stages of directing my first real short film.

Any advice or tips you’d like to pass on to other writers?

Two things: Read and travel.

Reading expanding the mind and I recommend reading other screenplays which will help you with learning style.

By travel, I don’t just mean visiting the Eiffel Tower. I mean going to places where real people live and work. Travel also expands your awareness of other cultures and environments. You’d be amazed how much you draw on these experiences when you

Director/Producer: Matthew Toffolo

Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne

Editor: John Johnson

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