Winning Short Screenplay – EMPATHY IN THE ELEVATOR by Keith Makenas

Written by Keith Makenas


KEVIN – Vince Jerad
ROB – Matthew Lawrence
LUCY – Val Cole
NARRATOR – Andrea Lawrence


Genre: Drama, Comedy

A man struggling with his wife who’s gone gets compassion from a beautiful woman in the elevator.

Get to know the winning writer:

What is your screenplay about?

A husband/ father relies 100% on his wife to do the housework and raise their two daughters. When his wife takes a well overdue trip to a spa resort for a few days, he’s thrown into the fire and disasters begin the minute she leaves the house.

What genres does your screenplay under?

Comedy Drama

Why should this screenplay be made into a movie?

Anyone married and/or with children will relate to the content. It will show audiences it’s okay to laugh at your own troubles because some people have it much worse! It will also give fathers tips on how to manage daily life with kids, including legal and illegal tips.

How would you describe this script in two words?

Totally us!

What movie have you seen the most times in your life?

Too close of a call between CADDY SHACK and AIRPLANE

How long have you been working on this screenplay?

16 years of jotting down notes, 5 solely from married life and 11 combined parenting and marriage. Actually writing the screenplay about a month.

How many stories have you written?

About ten including rough drafts and completed, another ten outlined or conceptual.

What motivated you to write this screenplay?

I’m constantly joking with family and friends about married life and children, of course adding 95% drama and exaggeration. I was told by multiple people that I should write a comedy about it. So I did.

What obstacles did you face to finish this screenplay?

Just like all my other screenplays, being my own critic and that I’m never 100% satisfied. I write the first draft with a smile until I read it and know it can better. Then its rewrite, rewrite, rewrite.

Apart from writing, what else are you passionate about?

Keeping my family happy and laughing and of course not hungry.

Any advice or tips you’d like to pass on to other writers?

Don’t quit, don’t write thinking you’re going to make a million dollars, accept TONS of criticism, and write for yourself….unless someone actually does give you a million dollars to write a screenplay.

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Editor: John Johnson

Casting Director: Sean Ballantyne

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